A.O. Avalon

we're stuck in the throws of a victorian dance as we spin closer together then spin apart. you are my sun, i am the flower, i turn to you where ...

As you know, because you're sitting behind me, I'm laughing my ASS off. This is def. one of those pieces where a bit of insight into the mind of Gal ...

I find myself wanting to meet Sean C. He seems like quite the character. I enjoy the fusion of words, though over using it can become a bit annoying. I ...

I think it's a bit ironic that you're writing poetry about being older and wiser, Incan, but whatev. until this one blooded the wide-line newsprint deemed fit I don't like ...

There are instructions on how to use the "pre" button under each post window; make sure your BBC code is on (it's one of the options in your profile) and ...

I will attest to the truthfulness of this monolouge. She did in fact scream holy shit. At the top of her lungs. I like that you included your motivation for ...

Incan, you do have a way with words. I very much enjoy the way you've strung these words together, especially in the last stanza ("moving and unmoving"). However, it's all ...

I echo Gal on her comment about American society, which you have to admit is at least some what true. Furthermore, I don't think that writing must be obscenity free ...

Quick little history lesson... The "Romantic" period in history is defined as being a time when art was meant to spark the imagination, and appeal to the senses. So I ...

M'dear, this isn't so much a poem as it is a soliloquy. Or perhaps a monolouge sinced it is addressed to a second party? Either way, there's nothing wrong with ...

Why is it a "callous" sacrifice? It doesn't seem to fit with the theme of your poem. Is callous actually the word you wanted? If it is, then you need ...

Well while the "haha your hair's aflame" line was a bit childish but altogether very amusing. Sounds British-rocker-esque, which makes sense... I agree, I like songs that get their point ...

My body can't take the contortion Yet the stress does these things to me I thought I was normal or average I found out I'm a worthless nobody Firstly, cut ...

Mesh, You rock my world!! I feel the same way about grammar and poetry. I agree, dispense with the commas. Would be to lessen the beauty Of buds erupting from ...

This is fantastic... very funny and fun, and I LOVE the way you personify the days. The only thing that bugs me is that you don't seem to have a ...